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WritingTipsforGraduates:HowtoCommunicatewithRecruiters

Robert Morris
over 1 year Story
Writing Tips for Graduates: How to Communicate with Recruiters

A recruiter is human, which means he or she has to do the same things over and over again on a weekly basis. Quite often they do it the point where your recruiter becomes just as bored and irritated with the job as any other person. In order to avoid irritation, boredom, and in order to avoid mistakes that have been made in the past, the recruiter tries to learn from the day-to-day grind. 

This usually leads to an attitude that some equate to “experience.” A highly experienced recruiter will get an impression from the communication that he or she receives from graduates. This article will allow you to get into the head of a recruiter by seeing the world as he or she sees it. Below, you will find a series of snippets from emails that graduates have sent to recruiters. Below each snippet, you will find what the graduate thinks he or she is communicating and what the recruiter’s impression of the graduate is.


“I had to struggle every day to get my qualification, everybody was against me, but I never gave up and I finally got my degree.” 

What the graduate thinks – This line shows that I am determined and that I get what I want with hard work and true grit.

What the recruiter thinks – This graduate has a victim mentality and seems to focus on the struggle more than the success. This graduate will be difficult to work with and will probably cause a series of self-induced problems.


“I was ill for most of my college life and would have scored higher, but I still did very well either way.”

What the graduate thinks – This line explains why my scores were average rather than good. 

What the recruiter thinks – This graduate spent a lot of time being ill during college, and this suggests a trend that will continue. Even if the graduate’s illness was real, it is not worth the risk of hiring this graduate when there are hundreds of other applicants to choose from. 

“Army recruiters have also tried to recruit me, but their for people who are not too smart for college.”

What the graduate thinks – This line shows I am intelligent and a very self aware person. 


What the recruiter thinks – This graduate has a very ignorant nature and is prone to criticizing things she knows nothing about. In addition, she doesn't see the irony in calling a group ‘not too smart’ while making childish errors in her sentence. 


“I was very excited to read about your job opening and am looking forward to getting an interview with the Spiller Brothers corp as soon as possible.”

What the graduate thinks – This line shows that I really want the job. 

What the recruiter thinks – This graduate seems to want the job and it looks as if he or she has written this CV just for us at Spiller Brothers corp. It may be worth giving this graduate an interview to see if the person is as keen as appears to be. 

“Hobbies – I enjoy walking my dog. I enjoy eating at restaurants. I am playing PC games very frequently. I play soccer. I spend time with my family.”

What the graduate thinks – This section shows that I have normal hobbies. 


What the recruiter thinks – This graduate has entered such stock-answer hobbies that I suspect a writing service was used. Poor quality writing services often offer stock-answer text and make second-language English mistakes such as the ones in this section. It is hard to spot resumes and emails from high-quality writing services, but I strongly suspect this section was written by a cheap writing company.


“...I know that the job is repetitive in nature, and I know that it isn't all sunshine and roses, but minor downside of repeated lab culture tests is nothing when compared with the upside of being part of your bio-etheric energy project.”


What the graduate thinks – This section shows that I may not have experience, but that I do know what is involved in the job. 


What the recruiter thinks – This graduate’s CV shows that he has no experience, but he clearly understands the job and knows that part of the job is monotonous. This piece of text indicates that the graduate is aware of the negative sides of the job, which suggests he or she may not start and then quit quickly, (as many new hires do when faced with a difficult job.)


Conclusion – You Are Not Writing To a Machine


Your recruiters are human, and they will recognize signals and signs that you may cause problems if you were hired. Years of experience in the HR industry will teach you these lessons, but you don't have the luxury of that type of experience. That is why you need to concentrate on the idea of your recruiter being human, and your recruiter purposefully trying to avoid problems.

For example, recruiters dislike hiring people who quickly quit, hiring people who cause problems with other staff members, who are disrespectful, who have sick days, who do not follow orders, and much more. Examine your communication with recruiters and ask yourself what impression they may get from communication with you. 


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